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 Climbing the Smoke novel prologue

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PostSubject: Climbing the Smoke novel prologue   Thu Nov 01, 2012 5:08 pm

This is the prologue for the novel I was going to start writing a while back but decided to leave it until this month to start.

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I'm well aware that it's stupidly short but I just sort of wanted something that would explain that the story isn't set in this world. I'm also aware that bits of this may just be a totally rip off of Naruto but I totes swear it's probably gonna be nothing like Naruto when I'm done.

What do you guys think??

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PostSubject: Re: Climbing the Smoke novel prologue   Fri Nov 02, 2012 9:35 pm

Too much exposition. I like how the character speaks to the reader, but it's revealing far too much of the backstory in far too little words.

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