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PostSubject: My Immortal - Now with less Brain Cancer!    Wed Feb 15, 2012 7:10 am

So, an ambitious project begins.
Tell me what you honestly think.

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PostSubject: Re: My Immortal - Now with less Brain Cancer!    Wed Feb 15, 2012 7:59 am

Even with your edits its still horrible but by no fault of your own. I actually read it without rage throwing my computer out the window and yelling "IN THE NAME OF GRAMMAR I REBUKE THEE!" though so you get thumbs up there.

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OH SHIT YOU GUYS HARRISON FORD IS BACK FOR MY FANCY ASSORTED CHOCOLATES

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PostSubject: Re: My Immortal - Now with less Brain Cancer!    Wed Feb 15, 2012 11:03 am

Makes me think of our long-neglected Hogwarts RP...

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PostSubject: Re: My Immortal - Now with less Brain Cancer!    Wed Feb 15, 2012 11:08 am

Yeah too bad dimbo is harly ever on.

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PostSubject: Re: My Immortal - Now with less Brain Cancer!    Wed Feb 15, 2012 4:12 pm

He's back now.

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PostSubject: Re: My Immortal - Now with less Brain Cancer!    Wed Feb 15, 2012 6:13 pm

Alrighty, thanks for the review, J! (I'll reward it with a clothing description next chapter! Troll)

Also, feel free to take up the torch and do a few chapters too, guys. 44 Chapters of this is really hard to proofread.
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PostSubject: Re: My Immortal - Now with less Brain Cancer!    Thu Feb 16, 2012 1:42 am

i don't know if i could....i mean i could try but a rage quit or two might occur

the story is horrible with or without the grammar issues and i just cant write horrible things (at least i hope you guys dont think my stuff is horrible or I've failed as a writer)

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PostSubject: Re: My Immortal - Now with less Brain Cancer!    Thu Feb 16, 2012 2:45 am

Yeah, the story is awful. It's been established by the world's finest scientific minds that a Hollywood movie of My Immortal would cause cataclysm on par with the "Great Blank" in PS-0. Besides, having multiple people writing it, good or bad in their own personal opinionI know for a fact that I'm an awful writer., would add variety to it.
Hell. It could very well be a forum project if we all were to put our heads together.

And a ragequit or two? Hardly a problem. I'm taking things one chapter at a time, and if everyone gets on board with this, we'll have quite the line set up for people to wait their turn. That means everyone can have plenty of downtime to relax and stave off the rage.
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PostSubject: Re: My Immortal - Now with less Brain Cancer!    Sat Mar 03, 2012 1:09 am

In all honesty it still sucks, but you're right! Less brain cancer =D

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