The Fourth Day

Where blood is no thicker than water.
 
HomePortalCalendarSearchFAQMemberlistUsergroupsRegisterLog in
"part of me prefers just thinking Links a dumbass. if i wanted to summon the apocalypse and destroy Hyrule id built a little fence around myself and theres not a god damn thing he can do about it" - Naomi
Welcome to the Fourth Day, where everything's made up and the points don't matter.
That's right, the points are like Drae's opinion.
Colors are now freely available, PM Drae to ask him for yours!

Share | 
 

 "Tell Me, My Love" A Poem made Once upon a time ago.

View previous topic View next topic Go down 
AuthorMessage
†Saviha Vosterku†
Warming up
Warming up
avatar

Posts : 20
Friendliness : 43
Reputation : 0
Join date : 2011-09-02
Age : 24
Location : A Fading Dream

PostSubject: "Tell Me, My Love" A Poem made Once upon a time ago.   Wed Nov 16, 2011 9:38 pm

Tell Me My Love
Tell me my love,
Are you from up above?
Were you sent here to save me,
Or to guide me like a dove?
Every night I lie in bed,
While dreams of you fill my head,
Your presence has not left me,
Even though you are dead.
Like a shadow on the leaves,
You dance in the autumn breeze,
You sing to me each night,
And protect me from each fight.
You’re an impression on my mind,
That I wish one day to find,
And even though you are gone,
My thoughts of you are not done.
Even in the storms,
I hear your faint voice speak,
It finds me every time,
Even though it is quite weak.
Tell me now my love,
Is it still just the same,
Do you think of me,
Every passing day.
Or am I just a blur,
That's fading all away,
Never to return any night,
Or any day?
Back to top Go down
http://shadowstarlette.deviantart.com
Zalty
➳ ➳ ➳ ┌( ⁰△⁰)┘
➳ ➳ ➳  ┌( ⁰△⁰)┘
avatar

Posts : 3570
Friendliness : 3637
Reputation : 24
Join date : 2010-12-08
Age : 23
Location : Arkansas, usually

PostSubject: Re: "Tell Me, My Love" A Poem made Once upon a time ago.   Thu Nov 17, 2011 12:19 am

I'd give my opinion, but I'm pretty much tone-deaf when it comes to poetry, so I really wouldn't be able to.

One piece of advice, though, you should post the poems over a longer span of time, one at a time.

_________________
Quote :
“Only after the last tree has been cut down,
Only after the last river has been poisoned,
Only after the last fish has been caught,
Only then will you realise that money cannot be eaten.”
-Cree Indian Prophecy

ლ(ಠ益ಠლ)
Back to top Go down
http://draezeth.deviantart.com/
rickamaru
Demon Slayer (posted it to death)
Demon Slayer (posted it to death)
avatar

Posts : 613
Friendliness : 459
Reputation : 3
Join date : 2011-05-18
Age : 28
Location : Digging a pit (Digging Digging Digging)

PostSubject: Re: "Tell Me, My Love" A Poem made Once upon a time ago.   Thu Nov 17, 2011 1:41 pm

Very nice piece here. I like the message and can relate to it. You're rhyming is impressive as well. I struggle with my rhyming XP
Back to top Go down
Sponsored content




PostSubject: Re: "Tell Me, My Love" A Poem made Once upon a time ago.   

Back to top Go down
 
"Tell Me, My Love" A Poem made Once upon a time ago.
View previous topic View next topic Back to top 
Page 1 of 1
 Similar topics
-
» I Love Food!
» Fan made Chaos Dwarf army book
» HISTORY - Phase One: I Love Money
» First Person That Comes To Your Mind When You Hear A Love SONG!
» Twin Love : the story of Elzbeth and Earina

Permissions in this forum:You cannot reply to topics in this forum
The Fourth Day :: The Office :: Writing-
Jump to: